If there’s one thing I love, it’s dialogue. I’m not entirely sure why that is… Perhaps because I can sense the emotion more strongly when the characters speak rather than when the narrator does the talking? It’s kind of like the difference between going to someone’s website and reading “I love chocolate ice cream” versus going to the same site and reading “she loves chocolate ice cream”. One feels more connected to me, while the other one sound more descriptive.
Or maybe I’m just all wrong on that altogether? Could be.
At any rate, it shouldn’t surprise anyone, then, that I use a lot of dialogue in my writing. And the following sample shows this.
This scene takes place shortly after eight-year-old Celyna goes to live with Xiuhcoatl in his large estate in Elendri. Szandor, as Xiuhcoatl’s most trusted servant, is tasked with overseeing her adjustment to life in the manor. It’s also the first time Celyna encounters the use of magic.
“Yes, yes” Xiuhcoatl’s voice seemed annoyed. “I want to know what you think about how she’s doing emotionally. Do you think that she will adjust to life here?”
Before Szandor could answer, a high pitched screaming filled the room from the hallway. He looked around the room and then looked back over at Xiuhcoatl.
“Go see what that is,” Xiuhcoatl looked just as confused as Szandor was by the screaming, a sight that Szandor was not used to seeing.
ill for a few minutes, allowing Celyna to hold on until her cries softened to small whimpers.
watched in wonderment as tiny lights began to drop from the ceiling and dance in the air. They reminded her of the soapy bubbles that used to form while she was washing dishes back at her home.
“Good night,” Szandor whispered as he stepped back out of the room and slowly closed the door.